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[treasure capture!]

Exceptional Stick Animation

Overall, this is a well done piece! The animation was slick and the sound effects were perfect and spot on. Very impressive!

My only crit is the pacing. It started to drag a bit with all the attempts to get across. Other than that, an impressive piece!

[treasure capture]

A Good Preview

As simple and short as this was, it's still a very effective preview! It made me wonder what was going to happen next. My only crit is that sound fx would have gone a long way to make this more exciting.

Bottom line is most animators here on NG haven't a clue what a preview is supposed to be, but you nailed it! Good job!

[mr. dude episode 1]

This Was Alright

It told a story and the crude art moved it along. The pacing could have been a little bit better, but it wasn't too shabby. The credits ran far too long. I almost avoided the toon altogether because of them. Next time, you should either put them at the end and / or list a few of them at the same time. Good luck with the next installment.

[(2003)Dr. Bob]

You May Not Be Proud Of This ...

... but I think it's pretty damn good! It had me laughing out loud. Keep cranking out the gold! Great job!

Knox responds:

thank you this is great!i thought it would suck!

[arfenhouse teh movie too]

H-I-L-A-R-I-O-U-S!!!

This piece is BRILLIANT! This is the best parody I've ever seen because it seems to just about parody ... EVERYTHING! Excellent job! I look forward to the last installment!

[Theattack(duel4)]

Some Tips

WRITING - If your toons are going to rely on written English text to tell the story, the spelling and grammar should be flawless so it doesn't become a distraction. English may not be your first language (French?) so see if you can hook up with someone who speaks and writes fluent English. They can take care of any corrections for you.
SOUND - There's no way this toon should have been even close to 3megs. Learn to optimize your sound. There's a tutorial here on NG that can help you with that. This toon would also have benefited from sound fx. They would have made the fight scenes somewhat exciting.

On the whole, this isn't bad work for a beginner. I look forward to seeing you improve in the future! Good luck!

Dxkpower responds:

Yes my first language is french i did not see any spelling mistake..... i dont have anysound effects i dont no how to supress file size im not a beginner...i was just tired it was 3 am....see ya

[07/16/2003 Pogo Rampage]

Funny!

Bizarre and brilliant!

[Hybrid Heaven Episode 1]

Some Pointers

STORY - You should never have to explain your story in the Author's Comments. Your toon should speak for itself. If the story isn't clear, then there's a flaw in the script and you should go back and rewrite it. In the case of a series, you should reveal a little bit more in each installment. This helps to keep people interested and they'll come back for more.
SOUND - If you feel the need to have background music throughout the entire toon, try using various pieces. The single loop becomes distracting after a while. If you're still going to use voice actors, make sure your background music does not overpower their volume. As it is now, I could not hear anything they were saying because the music was louder than they were. It's great you put in subtitles, but the voices should still be audible.
PACING - The storytelling is too slow. It dragged too much and became boring. Try cutting your scenes shorter and closer together.
ANGLES - Static "camera" angles also make for boring storytelling. You had a sweep here and there, which were used well, but for the most part, we're left looking at a scene where two characters are just standing there. Try a few close-ups that show facial expressions as characters converse and switch angles every once in a while.
ANIMATION & ACTION - The characters are too static. When they move, their movements are limited. Learn a little bit more about dynamic animation to make the piece more interesting. The fight scene was poorly executed and choreographed. Check out a few action movies and study the dynamic angles used to make fight scenes seem more dramatic.

Sorry if this sounds harsh, I don't mean it to be. I see that you have the potential for great improvement and I'd like to see you get there. Keep practicing. I look forward to your next installment.

[Abduction Junction]

Well Animated!

Excellent use of frame-by-frame! You told a good story with great pacing and you have a fine cinematic eye. Great job!

[The best stick movie ever]

Not The Best Stick Movie Ever ...

... though that's its title, but still pretty good. You have a good eye for cinematic action and some of the fight animations looked pretty slick. What you need to work on is your timing (paced & moved a little too slow) and keeping your stick figures together (the legs kept on separating from the "torso"). Also, with the exception of a couple of misspelled words (i.e. paracHute) and a bit of bad grammar (maked in Flash = MADE in Flash) at the end, it didn't affect this piece at all. Hell, your English is better than some Americans' I know! Best of luck on your next project, I look forward to it!