NICE!
My only major crit is the action. It moved too quickly and became distracting. If you slow it down next time, it'll be less distracting to the eye. Other than that, I thought this was well done! The sprites were ripped nice and clean, the backgrounds looked great, the sound was spot on and the story was solid. This is an awesome effort! Great job!
Need More Practice
Your stop motion technique is very choppy and your characters "glide" a bit across the table top when they're supposed to be standing still. To fix this, add a bit more animation to the movements and tack down the characters with Funtack. Your lighting is also inconsistent. Try filming in an area where you can control the lighting. The sunlight coming into this project darkens as the project progresses making the shots look shoddy. With a bit more practice, you should greatly improve. Good luck!
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"Brief" Is Correct!
But I still think this wasn't too shabby. The animation was competent and the art, for the most part, was pretty snazzy. This piece really needs sound to make it noticeable. Not a bad effort.
TOP NOTCH!
These are the sprite toons by which all should be judged! The sprite ripping, storytelling, pacing and sound synching are all E-X-C-E-L-L-E-N-T!!! This sets the bar pretty high for animators & sprite animators alike! I'm thoroughly enjoying this series! Thank you for making such quality stuff!
Fun & Entertaining!
I have Niko1uk of the NG Sprite Club to thank for bringing this cartoon to my attention! As a credit to you, this cartoon was long, but it didn't feel long. You have a good sense of pace that kept the story fresh and interesting throughout. The humour was well timed and the battle scenes looked great! This shows great effort and talent! I look forward to more!
Thank you very much. :)
I hope me nest one will be good, too.
Well Done!
You can drop your overall file size considerably if you drop the quality of the music. There are tutorials here on NG and in FlashKit.com that explain how. Other than that, this was great! The music fit the mood & action of the piece and this episode's story makes me look forward to the next installment! Your time and effort really paid off here! This is a job well done!
If You Feel The Need ...
... to apologize at the end of your project for it seeming "rushed or short", you shouldn't upload it. What you post on NG should be something you feel you've put all of your time and effort in and is worth showcasing. That being said, this project is okay.
Though the backgrounds could be cleaner, the sprites could be better animated and the story could be better paced and told in a more interesting way, it shows you did put at least some effort into it. Best of luck on your series!
Tips
With this project, you've shown you can rip sprites, clean them up really well (except for a few letters in the text) and animate them with some basic skill. Next time, write a script that really challenges your skill set and is quite different from most of the parodies already on NG. I wish you the best o' luck on your next piece!
oops, didn't notice the few letters in the text. well its fixed now
Valiant Effort
PROS - You know what it is to put time, patience and dedication into a project! That's something not many animators do around here. You've got the goods! The ripped sprites were excellent! You did a bang up job in keeping them crisp & clean. The animation was flawless! It's hard to come by sprite toons that don't look choppy or ruin the animation in some way. You've tackled this very well! Your backgrounds looked awesome and the blur effect was perfect.
CONS - Don't ever assume the voices can be "easily ignored due to the prescence of subtitles." If they're in the piece, they're a part of it and are subject to criticism. They didn't carry any emotion and sounded as if they were recorded a bit too close to the mic. If you're going to have a character yelling, really yell. The story dragged because there was a poor sense of pacing. Some action scenes lasted a bit too long and became distracting.
Overall, this was a good, solid effort! You show skill and great promise as a Flash animator. If you put a little more study & practice into your script writing and pacing, your stories will be much more exciting! I've come to that conclusion after watching this project and reading some of your fan fiction. It's definitely a start! Best of luck in future projects! I look forward to them!
Someone actually followed the link to my Fanfiction.net account? Wow...
I Like "War of the Worlds" ...
... and I like this! The music was clever and the visuals were funny! This is a well paced piece. My only crit is that some of the raster images maintained a rough white outline which kept them from blending into the piece. To better clean those up in the next project, bring your raster images into Flash and click Modify > Trace Bitmap. Once it's broken up into pixels, it's a lot easier to remove those white pieces. This was a good effort and I wish you luck on future projects!
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